Monday, March 21, 2016

Today the
postman brought
me a maelstrom.
I got
sucked
.

1 Comments:

Blogger Elle said...

I love the idea of the postman bringing a maelstrom. I don't know if that happens so much anymore, with digital mail, but it certainly would have happened in the past. A letter that contained all sorts of drama. Certainly, these days we still get emails like that. And for someone who doesn't like drama, the idea of being sucked into that drama agitates me. I know that sometimes there is a need to get involved, and turning a blind eye to troubles is not always a good answer (it's not always the wrong answer either), but that doesn't mean I have to like being sucked in to it all. So yeah, this poem engendered an emotional response from me - sympathy for the poet who was sucked in to that maelstrom, and a feeling of discomfort that it might be me next time.

I'm not a fan of using line breaks in the middle of words, but the final word is still easy to read, and it does give a visual representation of that idea of being sucked down into the maelstrom. So I think it works here. It's definitely a 'less is more' concept with me, but I think for this poem it works well.

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